here are copy-editing changes i made on cory's "with a little help"... for changes that aren't global search-and-replace, i've given two lines. the top line is from cory's .pdf, and the bottom line reflects my edit... ********** turned rotated: 023-pdf> Greg turned rotated his head this way and that. "I'm sorry?" 023-zml> Greg turned and rotated his head this way and that. "I'm sorry?" ********** krotoski 094-pdf> Lawrence felt a rush of gratitude for this man. "Anja Krotosky, 094-zml> Lawrence felt a rush of gratitude for this man. "Anja Krotoski, ********** pseudo-forested 098-pdf> sun-dappled, ozonated pseuodoforested environment felt as stale as 098-zml> sun-dappled, ozonated pseudo-forested environment felt as stale as ********** lobjan 097-pdf> I counted backwards from five in Loglan. "No. He's a real AI. Who 097-zml> I counted backwards from five in Lojban. "No. He's a real AI. Who ********** ucl or ucla? 096-pdf> "There's a man," he said. "Art student at UCL. He's got a little stall 096-zml> "There's a man," he said. "Art student at UCLA. He's got a little stall 095-pdf> It was more than fair. His UCL student wasn't carrying anything 095-pdf> It was more than fair. His UCLA student wasn't carrying anything ********** missing quote-mark: 026-pdf> them. It would be a bad user experience. If we hadn't lost our don't- 026-zml> them. It would be a bad user experience.' If we hadn't lost our don't- ********** incorrect quote-mark: 034-pdf> 'Come on," she said. "I'm good, but I'm not superwoman. I was 034-zml> "Come on," she said. "I'm good, but I'm not superwoman. I was 095-pdf> "Or?' 095-zml> "Or?" ********** delete extra parenthesis: 097-pdf> each other with a crackle of (thankfully metaphorical) electricity). 097-zml> each other with a crackle of (thankfully metaphorical) electricity. ********** missing dash 999-pdf> they'd been born -- to her backbiting, over educated circle of friends. 999-zml> they'd been born -- to her backbiting, over-educated circle of friends. ********** missing/wrong word: 033-pdf> everything, everywhere, in shortest time. Rainer kept barking at the 033-zml> everything, everywhere, in the shortest time. Rainer kept barking at the 036-pdf> She looked back and Rainer and saw that he was staring where she 036-zml> She looked back at Rainer and saw that he was staring where she 045-pdf> room to be move the rest! I thought that for a guy who's always in a 045-zml> room to be moving the rest! I thought that for a guy who's always in a ********** sex change?: 093-pdf> the Institute had his hands full just getting oriented, and wasn't 093-zml> the Institute had her hands full just getting oriented, and wasn't ********** bugs: 006-pdf> expect everyone to do it -- and once everyone's done it, we're ttttt. 006-zml> expect everyone to do it -- and once everyone's done it, we're 007-pdf> Order of Reflective Analyitcs and one of our guys has disappeared. 007-zml> Order of Reflective Analytics and one of our guys has disappeared. 008-pdf> he ate with or playing on intramural teams with, or did a little 008-zml> he ate with or played on intramural teams with, or did a little 012-pdf> He called Greta. They'd given him a new pan, one that had a shunt 012-zml> He called Gerta. They'd given him a new pan, one that had a shunt 063-pdf> "Yes," Sean said, feeling slightly smug. Never ask yes/no question. 063-zml> "Yes," Sean said, feeling slightly smug. Never ask a yes/no question. 094-pdf> his relevance filtered were heavily tilted to BIGMAC news. He'd heard 094-zml> his relevance filters were heavily tilted to BIGMAC news. He'd heard 096-pdf> pocket that was transmitted every word to BIGMAC. 096-zml> pocket that was transmitting every word to BIGMAC. ********** improper ellipses: 050-pdf> who were doing the same thing. . . I did design the uniforms, 050-zml> who were doing the same thing... I did design the uniforms, 062-pdf> at entertaining me, actually. When I switch off, I just. . . go away. I 062-zml> at entertaining me, actually. When I switch off, I just... go away. I ********** missing apostrophe: 019-pdf> in other peoples' money. Whoever sold you that franchise conned 019-zml> in other people's money. Whoever sold you that franchise conned 092-pdf> important service updates for peoples toothbrushes and dishwashers, 092-zml> important service updates for people's toothbrushes and dishwashers, ********** correct the spelling: 029-pdf> "This place is just supercalifragilistic," she said, with an economical 029-zml> "This place is just supercalafragilistic," she said, with an economical 030-pdf> torn out of the bus-sheltters. The tubes glowed in the presence of 030-zml> torn out of the bus-shelters. The tubes glowed in the presence of 031-pdf> with built-up shoulders, a monocle, a string tie, nipple tassles, 031-zml> with built-up shoulders, a monocle, a string tie, nipple tassels, 067-pdf> Barbarian Lord of the Pickle Creatures of Outer Hebredes 067-zml> Barbarian Lord of the Pickle Creatures of Outer Hebrides ********** asterisk pandering: 049-pdf> mob to scare the s**t out of the guys driving the other trucks!" 049-zml> mob to scare the shit out of the guys driving the other trucks!" ********** rework structure: 089-pdf> that 'forced'--" she drew air-quotes -- "us to recall the loud ones, 089-zml> that 'forced'" -- she drew air-quotes -- "us to recall the loud ones, ********** don't leave hyphenates hanging: 087-pdf> and -punctuated to be a real chat message. It had only taken ten 087-zml> and well-punctuated to be a real chat message. It had only taken ten ********** machine-gun is hyphenated: 061-pdf> arguing both sides with machinegun passion and lucidity, running 061-zml> arguing both sides with machine-gun passion and lucidity, running 088-pdf> Noiseless, a machinegun rattle. He waited until she was done, then 088-zml> Noiseless, a machine-gun rattle. He waited until she was done, then ********** no need for apostrophe: 090-pdf> in this 'hood, people who've asked me to look out for the right kind 090-zml> in this hood, people who've asked me to look out for the right kind ********** edit floating slashes: 099-pdf> initiative. The AI is emergent behaviour from a network of tens / 099-zml> initiative. The AI is emergent behaviour from a network of tens/ 100-pdf> "what are the rights of a bankrupt / dying AI". 100-zml> 'what are the rights of a bankrupt/dying AI.' 102-pdf> work for the DoD, nobody knows about the AI). Also, being 2037 / 102-zml> work for the DoD, nobody knows about the AI). Also, being 2037/ ********** use full u.r.l. for websites: 106-pdf> relationship to lulu.com; and donating some of my office staff time 106-zml> relationship to http://lulu.com; and donating some of my office staff time ********** don't enclose e-mail address in parenthesis: 110-pdf> Cory Doctorow (doctorow@craphound.com) is a writer, activist, 110-zml> Cory Doctorow -- doctorow@craphound.com -- is a writer, activist, journalist ********** don't split u.r.l. over 2 lines: 111-pdf> journalist and blogger. He is co-owner/editor of Boing Boing (boingboing. 111-zml> and blogger. He is co-owner/editor of Boing Boing -- http://boingboing.net -- 112-pdf> net), a popular blog. He is also the author of several novels for 112-zml> a popular blog. He is also the author of several novels for ********** uppercased "magazine" 114-pdf> Make, The Guardian (London), and Locus magazine. 114-zml> Make, The Guardian (London), and Locus Magazine. ********** everyone knows where toronto and london are. 115-pdf> Born in Toronto, Canada, he now lives in London, England, with 115-zml> Born in Toronto, he now lives in London, with ********** set off with colons: 116-pdf> His personal blog is at craphound.com. 116-zml> His personal blog is at: http://craphound.com. 117-pdf> The entire text of this book can be downloaded from http://craphound.com/walh 117-zml> This book can be downloaded for free from: http://craphound.com/walh ********** titlecase for titles 001-pdf> With a Little Help is an experiment of sorts, an attempt to re- 001-zml> "With A Little Help" is an experiment of sorts, an attempt to re- 003-pdf> The Things That Make Me Weak and Strange 003-zml> The Things That Make Me Weak And Strange 060-pdf> Visit the Sins 060-zml> Visit The Sins 107-pdf> Why would I do such a thing? It's not pro bono. I'm only in it for 107-zml> Why would I do such a thing? It's not pro bono. I'm Only In It For 108-pdf> the money. 108-zml> The Money. 109-pdf> About the author 109-zml> About The Author ********** i prefer e-book: 002-pdf> ranging from free ebook and audiobook downloads, to print-on- 002-zml> ranging from free e-book and audiobook downloads, to print-on- ********** epigram formatting: 004-pdf> "And I won't always be this way, 004-zml> And I won't always be this way, 005-pdf> "When the things that make me weak and strange get engineered away" 005-zml> When the things that make me weak and strange 021-pdf> "Give me six lines written by the most honorable of men, and I will 021-zml> "Give me six lines written by 022-pdf> find an excuse in them to hang him." -- Cardinal Richelieu 022-zml> -- Cardinal Richelieu ********** commas needed: 009-pdf> Wednesdays 8:30pm 009-zml> Wednesdays, 8:30pm 010-pdf> Half Moon Cafe 164 2nd Ave 010-zml> Half Moon Cafe, 164 2nd Ave ********** disambiguate quotemarks: 011-pdf> around at the room "-- is a good idea? I mean, this is just--" 011-zml> around at the room "--is a good idea? I mean, this is just--" ********** title-fix: 013-pdf> Now (-ish) 013-zml> Now(ish) 014-pdf> +75 years (or so) 014-zml> 75-plus years from now(ish) 015-pdf> 150 years from now(ish) 015-zml> 150-plus years from now(ish) ********** walmart spelling fix: 017-pdf> Gretl's stall in the dead WalMart off the I-5 in Pico Rivera was not 017-zml> Gretl's stall in the dead Walmart off the I-5 in Pico Rivera was not 020-pdf> off among the stalls in the dead WalMart. 020-zml> off among the stalls in the dead Walmart. ********** rewrite: 016-pdf> This is another story that was inspired by Patrick Nielsen Hayden; 016-zml> This is another story inspired by Patrick Nielsen Hayden; 032-pdf> routes in realtime and emerge a solution to the problem of getting 032-zml> routes in realtime and emerge solutions to the problem of getting 035-pdf> well." 035-zml> well..." ********** al-quaeda 024-pdf> al-Qaeda frogman, and didn't seem to believe that Greg had just 024-zml> al-Quaeda frogman, and didn't seem to believe that Greg has just 025-pdf> "Um, OK? You're not going to tell me you're a deep-cover Al-Qaeda 025-zml> "Um, OK? You're not going to tell me you're a deep-cover al-Quaeda ********** substitute slash for dash: 027-pdf> really depressing song-prayer-dirge that's specially engineered to 027-zml> really depressing song/prayer/dirge that's specially engineered to ********** e.g., needs comma after it: 028-pdf> they were besotted with e.g. post-orgasmic brain-juice or a couple of 028-zml> they were besotted with e.g., post-orgasmic brain-juice or a couple of ********** indian name: 037-pdf> the Akwesahsne Sovereign, she'd broken the hearts of a half-dozen 037-zml> the Akwesasne Sovereign, she'd broken the hearts of a half-dozen 038-pdf> Akwesahsne was supposed to be a cakewalk. The Canadian Radio 038-zml> Akwesasne was supposed to be a cakewalk. The Canadian Radio 039-pdf> The first hint came from the guard in the pillbox at the Akwesahsne 039-zml> The first hint came from the guard in the pillbox at the Akwesasne 041-pdf> The Akwesahsne Warriors took the cake, though. A fat, middle- 041-zml> The Akwesasne Warriors took the cake, though. A fat, middle- 042-pdf> Akwesahsne was just the sort of woods that the CogRad gear thrived 042-zml> Akwesasne was just the sort of woods that the CogRad gear thrived 044-pdf> sahsne Rez had been at peace for almost three years! Why the hell 044-zml> asne Rez had been at peace for almost three years! Why the hell ********** sign formatting: 051-pdf> tossed me the paper he was reading. It said MEMO TO ALL EMPLOYEES 051-zml> tossed me the paper he was reading. It said: 052-pdf> REGARDING NEW SECURITY MEASURES. And underneath, it said, 052-zml> REGARDING NEW SECURITY MEASURES. 053-pdf> EFFECTIVE IMMEDIATELY ALL AC OUTLETS ARE TO BE COVERED WHEN NOT IN USE. 053-zml> And underneath, it said: ********** triple-nested quote: 046-pdf> I said, "Tony says that 'If you were 'in charge;' that you wouldn't 046-zml> I said, "Tony says that 'If you were 'in charge' that you wouldn't 047-pdf> have time to squander with us. He says: 'You're just a puppet of the 047-zml> have time to squander with us.' He says: 'You're just a puppet of 048-pdf> 'Ones In Charge''" 048-zml> the 'Ones In Charge''." ********** turn "brief" into quotation: 098-pdf> It's 2037 and a company has built an AI as a skunkworks 098-zml> "It's 2037 and a company has built an AI as a skunkworks 101-pdf> As bisto, maybe there's a defense angle (the company was doing 101-zml> "As bisto, maybe there's a defense angle (the company was doing 103-pdf> result. Perhaps there's an open source angle too. 103-zml> result. Perhaps there's an open source angle too." ********** reformat for title-change: 054-pdf> This is the first story I ever sold to Patrick Nielsen Hayden, who 054-zml> This is the first story I ever sold to Patrick Nielsen Hayden, 055-pdf> also bought "The Things that Make Me Weak and Strange Get Engineered 055-zml> who also bought "The Things That Make Me Weak And Strange" 056-pdf> Away" and all of my novels. I wrote it in one big gulp while 056-zml> and all of my novels. I wrote it in one big gulp while shut in at a 057-pdf> shut in at a hotel room in Montreal on a business trip. It was snowing 057-zml> hotel room in Montreal on a business trip. It was snowing, and I 058-pdf> outside, and I could see the shredding vans moving through the 058-zml> could see the shredding vans moving through the streets below; 059-pdf> streets below, and I typed and typed until my hands hurt. 059-zml> and I typed and typed until my hands hurt. ********** correct these emphasized words in the s.s.t. version: [fuck] ::shudder:: Trish set the glass down and said [whoopee] very quietly and very ********** make sure all ellipses are followed (or proceeded) by a space: was all over, it all felt a little...ordinary. But in a good way, Ordinary disappeared into our...operations. Not knowing is the kind of thing jokes. Lately I've been feeling...watched. All the time. Like I can't live everything good, built more on top of it. It all just...worked. You're and he either runs screaming or...fits in. It's worse when the latter "So you wanted me to...what? Walk in the wilderness first?" is just Mark I, the system we jury-rigged after Buhle's...accident. ********** correct these asterisks in the s.s.t version: "The entry checkpoints, Lawrence. You can*{not}* do this job if you're going to the s**t out of the guys driving the other trucks!" "*How's Grampa?" Sean's father asked. "No," I said, thinking /it's not a lie, /I* won't be switching you off*, trying a handbasket as a result. Perhaps there's an open source angle too.* ********** high-bit words naive cloisonne quebec surete ********** here are floating quotes that should be opening quotes: " -- it's just metadata. So it's only slightly evil." the search results "-- but instead of lowering your search rank, we he said this in a pinched, Mickey Mouse voice " -- or whether you're forearm. " -- I worked in a dairy, answering the phones! You tell which you failed to mention--" Uh-oh " -- and I could shut that " ' -- you're losing,' " he said. "Yeah, I've heard that. Well, you're the "Envoy," she said. " Name's Buhle. I ran his face and name against ********** here are floating quotes that should be closing quotes: under mysterious circumstances and I want to -- " How to or from day-care. She -- " Posy broke off and stared again. "I once "That's fine, if you have the choice. But -- " He broke off, looking lips pulled back. "Watch where you're going -- " he said, and then he How've you managed to convince yourself that this -- " he gestured week -- " She listed six candidates, four Republican and two Democrat, Greg, buddy. I'm not a cop. I work for -- " He named the DC firm in happened -- " But it did, didn't it? She'd left him to come east and "Oh, hon -- " she said. to it. I want to meet your -- " What? Employer? Patron? Owner? He want to pitch something to Buhle, or -- " He let the thought hang out that 'forced' -- " she drew air-quotes -- "us to recall the loud ones, up -- " she calculated in her head -- "it's about 83 percent." "It's just that -- " He dropped his voice, striving to keep any kind of scooping my job and exiling me to Siberia -- " he held up a hand to licks though -- " He looked intently at them. "I'm an old man," he into this -- " He waved his hands around. "This body, this monstrous, "Uh -- " He'd caught me off-guard. "Yeah, that did make me think back up every bit of him -- " She held up her hand, forestalling the "BIGMAC -- " I heard the anger in my own voice. He couldn't have about this. And he knows we plan to kill him -- " She opened her gency meeting. I talked them out of it. And there's -- " She waved her which you failed to mention -- " Uh-oh " -- and I could shut that patchkit he wrote -- " I held my hand up automatically to preserve google all of us, everyone who works on anything 'sensitive.' " "And you're dressed as -- ?" mean not-human-readable. " the Hill was, 'If you're explaining -- ' " or I'll throw your ass out of the fucking bus. Drive! " I said, "Wow! Do you mean: 'Tony is right? ' ! " "What makes you think she left me? " Sean asked. "Oh, won't this be fun? " Adele said, as he ground the crap from Why? " Leon nodded slowly. "OK, I'll buy that. Makes you entrepreneurial-- " there -- " out -- " for -- " "Of course not," Lawrence said. "I didn't realize -- " reason to keep you away, doesn't that mean -- " He felt slightly put upon. "That's what I'm trying -- " bed -- " "But -- " wrong -- " man at Penn Station today -- " Station the truth -- " them. "It's to keep you out! All of you, who treated us -- " around at the room "-- is a good idea? I mean, this is just -- " "Long gone as in -- " But it wasn't that pitch that soured me on Sand Hill Road -- " firms -- " Greg felt sick. "Why? Don't tell me Yahoo was doing it already -- " peace with them before they clobber us. This isn't PIIPIIPII -- " "I thought you said the courts wouldn't let them -- " of a bad guy and you're -- " "But you're under constant scrutiny -- " "Maya, what are you -- " "Where do you want to -- " those Gmail users -- " Whatever. This is crazy -- " "We're drafting a team for Building 49 -- " inside -- " political life of your country -- " you don't clean -- " either -- " love, which are kind of flipsides of the same emotion -- " "But you made that law -- " were playing -- " in bare feet loomed over her. "God," she said, "Rainer -- " walking-in-circles bit -- " didn't want to do it over the phone -- " appreciate -- " about this understands that this is just paranoid raving -- " God, Trish -- " before going into a federal building -- " proven out -- " make up for him -- " "Trish," he said, "I'm sorry, I didn't mean -- " you're forcing me out because you're not my friend anymore -- " search firms -- " "Leave them," the Series A man said. "We aren't insured -- " and the first man, and his family -- " sale -- " "It's nice to meet you, Ms -- " anything here -- " from, but it popped into my head -- " videos and they seem, you know, they seem -- " around in strollers, necking on benches -- " and what you do best is -- " go to someone like you, someone decent. Not some developer -- " need money to -- " I assumed it was a stroke or -- " should tell you that mine have been indifferently cared for -- " "Tuned sound," she said. "A party trick. Buhle -- " people who were willing to take it. So we -- " "And your best friend beat your brains in -- " you that project, gave you a budget for it -- " electronics in the last century. If we could get them in the door -- " had the guts. If I hadn't, you and everyone you know would be -- " project. Then we could have talked about where you'd fit in here -- " any scale we want -- " one -- " Ate onto you and got us interested -- " "I don't think so," she whispered. "Not really. It's more like, like -- " He had me there. "It would be terrible -- " believe that it will. AI is just -- " how much we value you -- " help but feel -- " ones aren't. I know BIGMAC has done a lot of work on it -- " for the Institute -- " an apology -- " out for quite a while. But after your latest stunt -- " "BIGMAC -- " world -- " with her -- " then -- " no more than we are now, I suppose, and BIGMAC -- " ethics -- " got six more interviews lined up for you tomorrow -- " know -- " throat. "That would be lovely. Mexican. I mean, 'taco bell,' " she said. "'--you're losing,' " he said. "Yeah, I've heard that. Well, you're the ********** close up end-paragraph em-dashes: He couldn't see the man, but it was so dark in the restaurant -- to -- I'm not the first, not the only -- we've got lots of company in here -- thereof, of course. And counting emulations, there were only -- target. Maybe he had a second message queued up -- were -- something disarmingly vulnerable and -- ********** decapitalize "am" and "pm" in times: It was 3AM before they let him out of the "secondary screening" Dolores Park at 6AM by 350 pounds of drooling brown canine. screen to life. He squinted at the toolbar clock: 4:13AM! Christ, who co-workers. Today, she'd been glued to her seat from 7AM to after He rang her doorbell at 5AM. She was barely able to drag herself Grampa said, "Yes. He's catching the 6AM. He'll be here by 10." 4:12AM. He stifled a groan. the other in a toast. I don't normally drink before 10AM, but this tsked, and checked her phone instead. "It's 10AM. You are going to Wednesdays 8:30PM hours starting at 11PM and you can take that home." "Think about it. I close down at 6PM. You come by then, if you're Greg landed at SFO at 8PM, but by the time he made it to the front giant graveyard a few minutes after 1PM, just over an hour late, along "Who's got a 3PM deadline?" she said. Two of the print-reporters held up their hands. "You then you," she said. "Who's got a 5PM filing deadline? 6PM? 10PM?" She triaged them all, promised to meet the deadline? 6PM? 10PM?" She triaged them all, promised to meet the warrant against Annalisa Mor at 8:17PM on the evening of June 3, ********** be consistent on "mr." and "mrs." and "ms." and "dr.": "Twenty minutes, Mr VC." the payroll, expanding poco a poco. I'm sixty years old, Mr Gonzales, "Come with me, Mr Lupinski." "Good night, Mr Lupinski." This was a new interrogator, a man of Mr Navy 2048) was saying at the phone's other end. I help you, Mr Whitehead?" The voice was smooth and oily, like the capital, high-risk, high-payoff longshot Mr Brautigan. I can keep he knew, and said, "In recognition of his excellent work, Mr Brautigan's of Ate yourself, haven't you?" He nodded. "And that's why Mr Brautigan "Mr Vyphus, can I speak to you in private please?" Peyton had accounts." He restrained himself from rolling his eyes. "And so Mr from Mrs Roux's kitchen -- her kids sold them on a card-table on He took a few steps back. "Does Ms Krotoski still live here?" 6. This Constitution shall satisfy Ms Dunwitty's Civic Engagement But what if -- and here's the exciting thing, Ms Attorney Client